Hakone, Japan. Click for source.
i walked past the gates
and found myself in a new world:-
Can’t wait to visit Japan!
This is what they call a ‘Torii’, a gate-like structure that is ubiquitous with the Shinto religion. The kanji (鳥居) literally translates to ‘Bird Dwelling’, no idea why. Nonetheless, it marks the transition from the profane to the sacred in the Shinto religion, and is an apt imagery for the message I was attempting to relay in this haiku: human beings, due to human nature, have, intentionally or not, inadvertently profaned the world we live in, and the ‘author’ marvels at the beauty of a world untouched and unpolluted by human desire.
War aside, I have always found Japanese culture rather fascinating. Perhaps years of watching anime might have had a profound effect hahahahah! 😀
As an aside, I’ve began working on writing a story. If I am disciplined enough, it might eventually turn into a novel, but for now, you might see chapters of the story sprout up here and there with no real chronological order behind it; I will just write whatever I think of as a world building exercise, and hopefully, eventually I will be able to piece them together to form something cohesive!
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the distant laurels
now bloom at my fingertips,
but i do not stop.
No points for guessing what inspired this hahahaha!
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the lonely hours
felt increasingly distant
as ‘i’ became ‘we’.
wandering through the starless night;
amidst laughter on these soulless streets:-
ah… here’s a face i’ve seen in dreams.
Did a 8-9-8, hopefully it didn’t lose the haiku ‘feel’.
as our entombment ended-
endless fields of spring.
Art by Marshu @ deviantart
our backs on moist grass
as clouds scattered that quiet night-
the cosmos smiled back.
I’ve never written a haiku before so I’d appreciate any feedback.
I have read a few articles on writing one and so far I gathered the following characteristics:
i) Juxtaposition of two ideas;
ii) Separated by a cutting word (kireji);
iii) If possible, include a seasonal word (kigo);
iv) Use sensory language – show what you saw, instead of telling what you feel;
v) Capable of being expressed in one breath.
vi) Typically in a 5-7-5 syllable format.
And… I’ve tried to incorporate them as best as I could. Still feels lacking though. 😦
p/s: for those who are curious, the art is based on an anime called Bakemonogatari, one of my favourites! Those who appreciate witty dialogue and smart wordplay will appreciate it! 🙂